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Sue, this is eye-opening. How you can get so much emotion and essence in just a few words. It’s astonishing. I had no idea.

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Thank you, Fran. As my old city editor used to write on memos to reporters: Rite Tite. A newspaper is a good place to cut your writerly teeth, as you well know. Posting comments to Facebook polish them.

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perfection! I love short stories. yes, less is always more! thx Sue.

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Beautiful. I think I stayed in that motel myself, somewhere outside of Victorville. Big mistake. Great last line, Sue.

I loved the image of the baby slapping the train window in that bitter-sweet little tale.

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Thank you, Sharron. I'm getting a kick out of writing these vignettes. Both of these were taken from life. Patty was a friend from school. The hotel scene happened when I did just as the character did, chose the cheap flophouse next to the one with the swimming pool. Only the swag lamp was added from another cheap motel experience. You know, I really do need to step up my travel digs.

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